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People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages.

#people #help #tv #programmes #internet
Many
of
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humans
becomes
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popularity
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 personal with the help of
variety
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TV
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of TV
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 programmes or
in
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on
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 the internet and Etc. we should discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
these sphere
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.
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, the most popular individuals
which
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becomes
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become
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 famous
they
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have anyone else. It may be
talant
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talent
, hardworking either one of the thing with help interested public. Nobody
don’t
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 expect everybody could be
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a star
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star
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 with the help internet.
Internet
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 can
shows
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 different ways.
However
, it has
majority
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 options network. Current one of the Tik Tok.
System
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 is very easy each people can demonstrate his
talant
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talent
 or anyone fascinating action after which could be
popular
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a popular
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 person. There is amazing because each
individuals
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individual
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 might say
anout
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about
 yourself. And get huge popularity. One of the disadvantages
when
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human
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humans
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have
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 a lot of
fan
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,
intraped
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entrapped
intrepid
 in personal life. Though, popularity is
huge
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 opportunity which not
give
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 many people. In summary, I want to say if humans have
such
 chance, that
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everybody
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every body
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everybody
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 should go to them.
However
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 we couldn’t again get
this
 opportunity. Concerning, we must understand all
this
 structure and don’t pose
never
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this
 chance.
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