People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages.

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humans
becomes
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popularity
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personal with the help of
variety
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TV
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programmes or
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the internet and Etc. we should discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
these sphere
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these spheres

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which
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becomes
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famous
they
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have anyone else. It may be
talant
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, hardworking either one of the thing with help interested public. Nobody
don’t
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expect everybody could be
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a star
the star

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star
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with the help internet.
Internet
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can
shows
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different ways.
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, it has
majority
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options network. Current one of the Tik Tok.
System
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is very easy each people can demonstrate his
talant
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or anyone fascinating action after which could be
popular
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person. There is amazing because each
individuals
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might say
anout
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yourself. And get huge popularity. One of the disadvantages
when
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human
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humans

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have
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a lot of
fan
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fans

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,
intraped
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in personal life. Though, popularity is
huge
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a huge

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opportunity which not
give
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many people. In summary, I want to say if humans have
such
chance, that
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every body
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should go to them.
However
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we couldn’t again get
this
opportunity. Concerning, we must understand all
this
structure and don’t pose
never
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