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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and include and give your opinion Give any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
In the 21st century, human
life
 became more complex and busy. Ostensively, some
people
believes
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 that doing
same
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 thing makes
life
 more boring but others
believes
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 that it is an essential source for
a
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life
.In
this
 essay, I will explain the constructive and destructive effects of
changes
 with
the
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examples.
However
, exploring new
changes
 and routines makes everyone's
life
 more lively and happy.
Although
,it can
result
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inresult
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 creative ideas, scientific innovations, new theories related to various subjects and
solution
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 for day-to-day problems. Admittedly, all the discoveries of
human
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 world
derived
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 from
new
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 creations of
people
.
For example
,
according to
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Freud, (father of psychology) described that
changes
 are inevitable that makes human beings more creative and adaptive persons.
In addition
, scientists like Albert Einstein, Newton, Charles Babbage etc are famous because of their innovations that create
new
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way
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 of
of
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modification in human society.
Moreover
, all
changes
 are not good for
life
 because
this
 may
result
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inresult
fromresult
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 problems and
adjustmental
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adjustment
adjustments
 issues in
life
. To illustrate
this
, there are two types of
people
 night and day persons whereas the night person selected study early morning it will affect his academic career because he is not active in
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early morning compared
to night
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tonight
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.
For instance
, any
changes
 that
introduced
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 through external or internal force result
failure
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.
Besides
this
, it will give physical and mental stress among
people
. so that means without satisfaction any
changes
 are unsuccessful. In conclusion, there is a saying 'every coin has two sides'
similarly
 every
changes
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 has two sides.
Therefore
, our decisions are more important and
it
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 should be relevant for the situations.
Subsequently
, whoever
making
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 new exploration make sure that it will not harm others.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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