Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is considered that the most significant purpose for authorities is progressing
economy
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. While others argue that there are other
factors
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be paid attention to similar
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others. In my view, for developing the
economy
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of
countries
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all types of
factors
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should be regarded
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as medical care services and educational
system
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economic development is an essential key to creating many careers for
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. When some
countries
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are richer than others, they do not have a concern about
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the financial
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system
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. My point is, they
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are never
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affect
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affected
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by increasing inflation or fluctuation of currency.
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they establish some novel jobs, boost trading with other
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and make
profit
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a profit
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.
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, the United Kingdom has a powerful
economy
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in
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the
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worldwide, because it utilizes many experts in
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field, eliminates
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inflation and develops its bond to other
countries
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. On the other side, other
people
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believe that improving other subjects are necessary
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economy
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the economy
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. In my view,
Medicare
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the Medicare
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care
system
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is one of the vital elements for any
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countries
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country
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. When
country
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a country
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becomes
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in treatment all
people
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around the world come to
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place for curing.
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, during
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coronavirus
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all
countries
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combat each other to
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vaccine and they wanted to become well-known in the world that the US was the
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country who discovered it.
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The educational
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system
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is the
second
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important
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factors
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that can upbringing pupils and in the
future
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they will become potential
people
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for society and assist
government
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the government
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for having
effective
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an effective
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economy
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.
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, some
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have impressive systems for education or
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prestigious universities that other
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students
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from other nations apply for them.
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, for
developing
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the developing
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economy
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of a country all
factors
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should be considered. In conclusion,
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, progressing the
economy
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of
countries
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is a significant issue, in my view, other
factors
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namely medical care and educational
system
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are important too and we should consider all
factors
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equally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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