In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can-should be done about it.

Unemployment is something with which every country struggle. The higher amount of population, immigrants or shortage of
job
fields
brings about
this
problematic situation. The governments play a vital role in alleviating adverse influences of unemployment. They should create a wide range of
job
areas and distinguish between migrations and local humans.
First
of all, a lot of
poeple
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people
live under bad conditions since they can't be taken on any
job
since their domains are not thought as an important area.
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, in my
country
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if one
graduates
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from a university department
such
as chemistry, physic or history they have to be a teacher in a school. If they not, their chance of working in their
fields
will be so low. Due to the lack of investments in these sectors, students reckon that merely being a teacher can save their lives.
Therefore
,
initially
, they give up their interests and pick out another way to study. A
further
reason why there are plenty of unemployees is
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the density of population.
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this
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local authorities are still key aspects, as well. Supposedly, there are 700 thousand
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chemistry students and 400 thousand of them graduated from quality universities. When they search work
fields
they can't see any vacancy since either place have already had their own staff or there is not
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amount of opportunity. More often than not,
such
humans pick out brain migration and leave their environments. The more young generations work in other countries, the more their hometowns will be put in a dire state. To prevent these challenges, authorities should arrange their population proportions
such
as by taking measures about birth control like once China did or should enable migrations distinct
fields
by not involving them in local ones. In the light of the facts recounted above, intense people amounts in countries and the shortage of wide range
job
areas people suffer from unemployment. To alleviate these drawbacks, governments have to control birth amounts and distinguish migrations so that they can priority local people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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