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Influence of human beings on the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio diversity? What solution can you suggest.

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The extinction of
species
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 and the loss of biodiversity has been impacted by human beings as the
world
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 ecosystem.
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 there are some causes of
this
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 negative trend, there are some solutions for
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. The
first
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 aspect to point out is that the loss of land for some
species
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 is one of the causes. Overpopulation has become one of the concerns in modern society. As the population has been expanding in the
world
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, the habitats for wild animals has been demolished. There is much less nature in the
world
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 where these animals can feed themselves and breed. Another reason is that air pollution affects some of the
species
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. If the air is polluted, the rain is
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 polluted.
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, not only some
species
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 in the ocean are affected, but the plants in the natural
areas
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 are
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 damaged by the polluted water.
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, many
species
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 in the
world
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 is at risk of extinction.
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, there are some solutions for
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 negative development.
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, people should move to rural
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 with conditions. It seems to have the same issues in the future if individuals live in remote
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.
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, the government could restrict the number of facilities in those
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 in order to protect the habitats for the wild animals in the countryside.
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, the public needs to be aware of the negative impact of the usage of vehicles. If they used more public transports on a daily basis, the amount of air pollution would reduce gradually.
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 would be beneficial for biodiversity in the
world
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. To conclude, human beings have been damaging the whole ecosystem.
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, the onus is on the public to try to bring back nature as it used to be.
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