We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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was always debatable due to
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computer
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. Which is
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increasing day by day. There is not only
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in business,hospital, crime detection but
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good or suspicious of their merits. On one hand, there are many things will
computer
may
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for in the future. The
first
and foremost one is that an education purpose which can be used by
people
and children.
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makes work easier and comfortable so
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can get better information related
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for using
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computer
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is saved time
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students.
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internet
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is very useful for searching everything related to study
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another cause is
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for space research. By
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communication may be easier
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the satellite.
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, there are many causes why defending on computers ar suspicious of their benefits. The vital one is that over depending on computers may be crowd more lazer rather than past.
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can get everything on a window.
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at a workplace. So
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people
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for a while.
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additional reason is that health problems are increaseing
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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