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Nowadays increasing of houses and buildings are the common things in many countries. It has many factors.

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Introduction
Nowadays increasing of
houses
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 and
buildings
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 are the common things in many countries. It has many factors. In my
view
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 it is mainly from
increasing
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the increasing
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of
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population. The
houses
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 and
buildings
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 are crucial places in our life because the most of
times
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time
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 in a day, many
people
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 usually spend it in
houses
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 and
buildings
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 for working and accommodation.
This
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 is the reason why many
people
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 begin to
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be interest
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interest
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interested
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information
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in information
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 about
houses
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 or
buildings
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 that they have a chance to live in.
Body paragraph 1
It is
commonly
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 to believe that many
people
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 tend to think about the
information
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is
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as
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 vital things that they have to study
it
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apply
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before they will make the decision to live in there. From my perspective, it is because of security
problem
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problems
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 which is the
first
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 priority in every part
in
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of
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 the world
for instance
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 many companies in my
country
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 always have
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an
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 emergency plan if they will face an unexpected situation so it seems
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security is the important
factors
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factor
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 that many
people
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 have concerned about it. In that
case
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 many
people
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 are interested in searching the historical
information
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 of the house or building they live in.
Body paragraph 2
It is
obviously
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 that my
country
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 has many unforeseen cases especially in the north and west side of my
country
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 which often has natural disasters
such
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earthquake
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earthquakes
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 and
flood
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floods
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. It is the
mainly
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main
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affect
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effect
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to
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of
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 collapsed building
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, therefore,
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therefore
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 everybody should
to
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apply
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study about
location
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the location
a location
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 that it has
high
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a high
the high
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 trend to occur unexpected situation before they make the decision to move in.
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, In the north of my
country
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 occurred flood disasters
in
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this
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 year which affected
to
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local
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the local
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inhabitant
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inhabitants
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.
Currently
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 many
people
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 can find out
this
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information
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 from the website that provided the
information
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 about natural disaster
Conclusion
To summarize, Security is
main
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the main
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 cause for many
people
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 are becoming interested in
observation
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observing
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 about the historical
information
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 of the house or building.

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