The best way to prevent people from smoking is to impose high taxes on tobacco products. In this way, people will be less likely to develop a long-term addiction to smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that
music
is the key to unite
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uniting
people
of different age groups and culture
.I completely agree with Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
this
statement and my view points
are described below. Correct your spelling
viewpoints
Music
is the
form of Art which is appreciated by a person Correct article usage
a
irresective
of Correct your spelling
irrespective
cast
,culture,community or religion they belong Correct your spelling
caste
too
and Correct your spelling
to
hence
giving the world a common ground to bond with each other.In todays
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today's
world
we see everyday examples of Add a comma
world,
people
enjoying music
of different cultures and connecting with each other over it.Add an article
the music
For
example
a famous song titled "Hymm for the Add a comma
example,
weekend
" by Capitalize word
Weekend
cold play
reached more than a billion views on Correct your spelling
Cold Play
youtube
. Correct your spelling
YouTube
this
was possible only because although
this
song had an english
origin it was equally Change the capitalization
English
appriciated
globally and now Correct your spelling
appreciated
on
their live concert we can see a diverse crowd Change preposition
in
people
from different cities and Change preposition
of people
culture
come together and enjoy their songs together giving them Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
opportunity
to connect with each other. Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
Secondly
,Music
even helps to break the age barrier.It is a great medium which helps in
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apply
people
of different generations to come close and vibe together. One great example for
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of
this
is, my father introduced me to the band "linkin
Park" and Change the capitalization
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then
we started listening to it together hence
, creating a strong bond between the two of us.We were able to overcome our generation gap by using the powe
of Correct your spelling
power
music
. In conclusion,Music
is a great tool to combine people
from different cultures and generations.It does not matter from which part of the globe you are or at what stage of life you are in you will always appreciate good music
and will have a bond with the person appericiating
it too.Correct your spelling
appreciating
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
