The best way to prevent people from smoking is to impose high taxes on tobacco products. In this way, people will be less likely to develop a long-term addiction to smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that
music
is the key to
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people
of different age groups and
culture
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.I completely agree with
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statement and my
view points
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are described below.
Music
is
the
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form of Art which is appreciated by a person
irresective
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irrespective
of
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,culture,community or religion they belong
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and
hence
giving the world a common ground to bond with each other.In
todays
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world
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we see everyday examples of
people
enjoying
music
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of different cultures and connecting with each other over it.
For
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a famous song titled "Hymm for the
weekend
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" by
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reached more than a billion views on
youtube
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.
this
was possible only because
although
this
song had an
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origin it was equally
appriciated
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appreciated
globally and now
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their live concert we can see a diverse crowd
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of people
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from different cities and
culture
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come together and enjoy their songs together giving them
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to connect with each other.
Secondly
,
Music
even helps to break the age barrier.It is a great medium which helps
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people
of different generations to come close and vibe together. One great example
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this
is, my father introduced me to the band "
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Park" and
then
we started listening to it together
hence
, creating a strong bond between the two of us.We were able to overcome our generation gap by using the
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power
of
music
. In conclusion,
Music
is a great tool to combine
people
from different cultures and generations.It does not matter from which part of the globe you are or at what stage of life you are in you will always appreciate good
music
and will have a bond with the person
appericiating
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appreciating
it too.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • impose high taxes
  • tobacco products
  • prevent
  • people
  • smoking
  • long-term addiction
  • less likely
  • develop
  • discourage
  • affordable
  • reduce
  • availability
  • market
  • financial burden
  • deter
  • young people
  • start
  • generate revenue
  • government
  • invest
  • anti-smoking campaigns
  • healthcare services
  • continue
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