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People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 present world, everyone is expected to
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 more than ever. In fact, they might
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 in two jobs to keep up with the competitive market. I agree with the idea of fixing the number of working hours and employers ought not to demand more
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 from their employees. And
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 will be proven by analysing the productivity that could be delivered by recovering more, as well as the possibility of having more exercise.
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, by having a good amount of
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 to recover, employees could deliver more and avoid burnout phenomena. 
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, many employees in the medical sector in the UK have to
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 sometimes for more than 16 hours.
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, there have been many accidents due to
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.
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, both employers and personnel could benefit from establishing a predetermined schedule.
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, people could use more free
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 to exercise. Generally, working from 9 to 5 means they are left with a little amount of
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 to be more active.
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, several studies are suggesting that a high number of workers are suffering from obesity due to the sedentary lifestyle we live in.
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, working less would encourage more individuals to be more active and keep fit. In conclusion, by working more freedom, people could have more energy to
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 and at the same
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 have a more healthy life.
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, I agree that people ought to
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 a fixed number of hours. It is recommended that government should promote a balanced way of life by running campaigns on television and radio.

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