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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the world in
such
 digital technology development, many parents face difficult choices in the type of entertainment for their
children
. Personally, I believe that reading books is preferable to watching TV and playing computer games.
Firstly
, reading is one of the key elements to enhance
children
's imagination,
for example
, that
children
 tend to imagine the scenes of stories or even put themselves into characters. It is essential to develop visualization at the important stage that can help them in the future. Some evidence s
how
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that visualizing when studying can boost the brain to suck i
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k
nowlegde
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knowledge
more effectively.
Furthermore
, I believe that reading itself is a good discipline to improve , as it builds concentration and cognition. We can see
this
 in the way that disciplined
children
 have their independent minds and critical thinking that leads to greater success in academic life.
In addition
, it is noticeable that m
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successful b
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read books more than playing games or so on.
Finally
, after reading stories,
children
 can discuss
this
 with their peers at school or parents can interact with their
children
 via
this
. I feel that an emphasis on reading could stimulate comprehensive development, learning s
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in particular
. I do appreciate that some opponents think that watching TV and playing games could help improve attention in a long term. While
this
 is correct, I feel that a potential drawback would outweigh the positive. In conclusion, I believe that reading is the wiser way, not just for cognitive development but
also
 vital learning skill. Sensible reading is an invaluable skill and a buffer for a big step in life.
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