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Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basic. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

#people #time
There is a controversial notion heating a debate over the fact that
people
 are rarer to walk on a regular basis than before.
This
 essay is devoted to analyzing the reasons and some tactics to encourage the community to walk. Without a shadow of a doubt, it is more infrequent that
people
 go on foot regularly.
Due to
 the development of
transportations
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transportation
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, communities have a tendency to utilize vehicles
such
 as
car
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cars
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,
motorcycles
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and motorcycles
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 rather than walking on the road.
Additionally
, communities are becoming more slothful than before so they mostly depend on vehicles to move from one location to another.
For instance
,
according to
 the WTO, the average walking distance of Vietnamese
people
 takes up only
one third
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 compared to the standard of WTO.
As a result
, it is undeniable that society scarcely spends
time
 walking on a frequent basis.
In addition
, there is a wide range of methods that can increase walking
time
 for the community. First of all, walking areas should be decorated with some 3D pictures or painted with flamboyant colours, which can easily attract the public.
For instance
, in China, the community draws all the steps on the stairs like a piano's button and applies advanced technology
that
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so that
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 the stairs can play out music
while
people
 are walking on it like a real piano. By using that way, there are numerous
people
 who are more interested in walking because they can listen to music
while
 walking.
Thus
, encouraging
people
 to spend more
time
 walking has an essential role. In conclusion,
although
people
 rarely like to walk, there is a myriad of tactics that can be applied to make society always spend their
time
 walking.
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coherence cohesion
Organize ideas in a clear and coherent manner with appropriate use of cohesive devices and logical progression of thoughts.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • streaming movies
  • browsing social media
  • playing video games
  • digital entertainment
  • active pursuits
  • resurgence of interest
  • fitness trends
  • outdoor adventures
  • group sports
  • perception of time
  • connectivity requirements
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