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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
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modern life majority of people have prefered graduating from
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 and a year later
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 to
university
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 and so,
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 situation commences to increase in
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society.
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advantageous
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 and
disadvantageous
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disadvantages
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what
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 is related to
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 selection of community has illustrated that, to become educated and to know educational campus have
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 influences in life. More precisely, to proceed from
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 to
university
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 make a chance to finish
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 early age for individuals. According to some who graduates from
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university
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 are able to found own career and business with getting skills what they obtain them from educational systems. I reckon that
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 it helps to
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 condition due to people should close your life with one.
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marriage in society can support
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statistical population of
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, to have a year off between finishing
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 and going to
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 has disadvantageous. I consider that people who
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 in society can not grow. Because it created new workers and specialists for government according to
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unemployment have multiplied in community. Every year each country try to divide maximum workplaces for working citizens.
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, to educated have to become with limits and they make a comprehensive decision for their educational plans. To sum up, consistent educated have advantages and disadvantaged for individuals. They must reckon everything for their future career and business.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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