Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while other think that people and community are become more isolated Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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both sides of the argument before making the final decision.
With regards to the new technologies, citizens from one country can make online friends from various parts of the world. If they have had a conversation with each Correct your spelling
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, they would have Correct your spelling
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broaden
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shared
experiances
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experiences
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understand
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life-style
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lifestyle
In addition
, my friends from volunteering workcamps can easily connect with me, in order to check on me and ask how it is going. Unless the existence of the internet, they would not know how I am.
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life
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controlling
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For instance
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completely
such
as Instagram or Facebook, due to these, they have prefered to stay alone in their rooms, rather than talking with the family. It has a huge Linking Words
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impact
for
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because these citizens have no one Remove the comma
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who
they can trust and they lose social skills.
To sum up, The internet has significantly made us connected with the rest of the world. I am strongly concerned, that all the advantages are Change the pronoun
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highly
overshadowing
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should be able to in the right moment return to the Use synonyms
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