Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while other think that people and community are become more isolated Discuss both views and give your opinion.

As we all know, the internet is a huge mine of possibilities.
For example
, due to
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we are able to communicate with
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people
from a long distance. Without
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online
access
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we would not be able to be in touch with humans we care about. But, there are
also
people
, who reckon that mobile devices
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had
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unfortune
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unfortunate
influence on us, when it comes to connections in real
life
,
such
as relations with the community.
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essay will
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both sides of the argument before making the final decision. With regards to the new technologies, citizens from one country can make online friends from various parts of the world. If they have had a conversation with each
oder
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other
, they would have
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their minds and
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experiances
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experiences
.
for Example
,
this
means that we can become closer
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different cultures and
undestand
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understand
their
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.
In addition
, my friends from volunteering workcamps can easily connect with me, in order to check on me and ask how it is going. Unless the existence of the internet, they would not know how I am.
On the other hand
, some
people
tend to forget about real
life
around them. Online
life
becomes more important
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than their relations with parents or the community. If they had not had
controling
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controlling
this
situation, they would have lost vital for
them
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close friends and would have
became
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lonely.
Likewise
, after some time they have realised
this
, but it
have
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been already too late.
For instance
, some of my peers are
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completely
addicted to the applications
such
as Instagram or Facebook, due to these, they have prefered to stay alone in their rooms, rather than talking with the family. It has a huge
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impact
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futer
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future
life
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because these citizens have no one
who
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they can trust and they lose social skills. To sum up, The internet has significantly made us connected with the rest of the world. I am strongly concerned, that all the advantages are
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highly
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any drawbacks.
People
should be able to in the right moment return to the
life
around them, so as not to regret losing vital humans for them.
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