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some people believe that the government should only pay attention to country's economic development while others believe that they should pay equal attention to all the sectors. Discuss both the views and give opinion?

The importance of economic
progress
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 which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many public are deeming that it is an important
part
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 of the country while others believe that government should develop other types of
progress
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 which are equally important for better
nations
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.
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 essay will
further
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 elaborate on both the positive and negative of
this
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 trend and give my opinion. There are myriad reasons why economic growth is important for a nation but the
first
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 and foremost cause is better economic gives many things like employment, development, respect and most important fact is that their
people
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 live a better life. Good
economic
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economy
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 attracted multinational companies and they generated employment,
that is
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 why their citizens have jobs and they earn enough money.
well-developed
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A well-developed
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 economy has one path for
nations
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 to develop many sectors and make an easy way for living life which is important for their
people
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. Developing an economy is a gateway for the nation to become more advanced.
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, there are some negative of
this
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 trend due to some
people
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 deem that another
sector
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 of development is unimportant
part
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 like health
sector
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, education
sector
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 and others. The education
sector
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 is important for
people
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 because educated
people
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also
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 build
nations
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 it is the main
part
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 of the country. The country which is one type of building those sectors are blocks of
this
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 building when those blocks would well be developed that means the building is automatically strong and developed.
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 why many
people
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 favour
this
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 view. To conclude, according to the argument one can reach the conclusion is that economic
progress
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 is important but in my opinion, another
part
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 of
progress
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 is equally significant in becoming good
nations
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. We can not ignore
this
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 development.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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