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There are some reasons why I would like to study in Korea. First of all, I like the Korean language itself – its structure and the way it sounds. Secondly, I'm deeply interested in Korean culture

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Letter of Self-introduction My name is Shorena Beridze. I come from the beautiful country
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Georgia
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of Georgia
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. I studied
in
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 Ilia State University for five years and graduated in 2005 double majoring in
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Georgian
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 and Literature and in
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Persian
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 and Literature. In 2018 I
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 obtained a certificate in Hospitality Management from the vocational college “Icarus”. My interest in languages started in childhood and eventually became my profession. Now I can speak four languages and I
work
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 as a Persian
language
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 freelance interpreter. Since I started working as an interpreter, my
life
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 has totally changed. At
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 I was attracted to literature and I enjoyed reading novels. Working with the police, I had to learn vocabulary related to criminality. I worked
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 and night everywhere. My
day
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 could start at the airport and end in
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jail. I interpreted on various occasions related to drug possession, theft, passport forgery, fraud etc. But I like
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 job and I earn decent money. My job is quite flexible and I have enough free
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 so I started learning Japanese with a private teacher three months ago. Another interesting period of my
life
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 was in Germany. After studying
Hotel
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 and Restaurant Management in a vocational college for six months, I spent two months in a resort on the Baltic sea called Ahlbeck. I worked there as a waitress at a
hotel
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 for four hours at breakfast
time
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 and four hours at dinner
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. After
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 on some days, I could hardly go upstairs to my room on the fourth floor. But when I saw
hotel
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 guests smiling with satisfaction because I knew in advance what they wanted to eat or drink, it made me forget about my tiredness. One
day
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 of my
work
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 was very special. It was lunchtime and I was setting tables when an elegant old man suddenly came to me and hugged me. I blushed from his unexpected expression of warmth. Good earnings gave me a chance to take lessons at The Asian
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 Center. Actually, learning Asian languages is quite expensive in
Georgia
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 and not everyone can afford it. You may wonder why I chose to learn
Korean
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.
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, I like the
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 itself, its speech melody, especially when my lovely
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 teachers speak. Another important reason is I have noticed that Koreans are interested in
Georgia
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. In the
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 2-3 years, more and more
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tourists
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 visited my country. According to the 2019 statistics, there were about 16 000
tourists
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 from Korea. It's a good number, especially given quite a long distance between the two countries. I am a practically thinking person and I see prospective
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 opportunities in
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 area. At the same
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, I really like helping people; it's one
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if
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 my values in
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. On a few occasions, I provided free guiding and even financial assistance to several
tourists
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. I really care for people. Once I interrupted my business trip to Iran just because I had promised to accompany one
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 tourist
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who
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 exchange app. I called my mother from Iran and asked her to buy some meat and marinade it. I took him to the ancient city Mtskheta and
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 we made a barbecue in the nearby forest. I spent all
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 walking with him and took him to his
hotel
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 late at night. I have guided a few
tourists
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 from different countries and I have really enjoyed it. Some of those
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 have become my friends. I am always ready to help people. When I do something good for someone, it brings me a lot of joy. In the
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 I want to start my own business, namely a travel agency. To realize my plan, I need to learn much more in
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 field, especially good communication and
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 skills.
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 why I have decided to apply to your university. I am determined to use
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 opportunity to make my plan come true. I have a dream to guide many
tourists
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 from Korea and show them the beauty of my country.
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 is what I would like to do for the rest of my
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.
Georgia
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 is famous for its ancient tradition of hospitality and a very special attitude to guests. We have a proverb that expresses it very well, “A guest comes from God”.
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