Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people thought that the amount of girls' and boys'
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number
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should be
same
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the same
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in each subject.I totally agree and support
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statement. Nowadays many universities
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equal
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an equal
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number
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of male and female students
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all classes.Dividing them equally is the best proper method by looking at the others thoughts.If the same amount of
pupil
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pupils
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will gather in a group,they can easily assimilate their knowledge together,simultaneously.
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,one of my
psychologists
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friends claim that
,
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this
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project will lead them to
being
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mentally strong and aids to avoid
from
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detrimental characters,
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as being selfish,ashamed and
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most especially saves from being sedentary people, during their entire life.The same
number
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of members which is studied in a class brings them many benefits and leads to
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future.
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,there are so many layers between human beings.Looking at the
muslims
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lifestyle,they restricted the
ideo
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idea
of studying together.
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,if boys
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number
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make up huge numbers than females,they may often bully
with
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each other and
this
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situation will baffle others from their
specialties
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. They can not focus on the subject,because of
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sphere.
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:In some
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the government protested that statement which we convey above.They
prefer
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accept male teenagers than females at university. In conclusion,universities and high schools should accept
equal
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an equal
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number
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of students in every subject.It will lead to
bright
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a bright
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future,and good manners
today's
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in today's
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youth.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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