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People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #hours #week #employers #anybody
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In the present scenario,
people
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 are becoming more workaholics and they are doing many more
hours
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 of
work
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 rather than a fixed
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 shift.
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, it is sometimes thought
workers
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 should have a fixed working period per week. In my opinion, I considered that a fixed number of
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 is beneficial to
people
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 and employer should not ask to them for extent their
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. There are several positive impacts on
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 if they have a regular roster job. The
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 and foremost important thing is that they have spare time. They have time for watching TV, going shopping, meeting with friends and so on.
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, one survey has conducted in the UK,
people
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 are less stressed who have fixed
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jobs
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 rather those who have extra
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.
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, they can spend a good quality time with family.
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, it gives numerous benefits to
people
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. Another reason to consider is that
workers
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 should not do extra
jobs
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 means they feel relaxed and refresh after working normal
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work
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.
People
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 can do some activities after
work
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 when they have limited
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 job.
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,They can go walking and can
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 do exercise.
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, extra activities are
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 necessary for refreshment.
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, the owner of the company does not force
workers
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 for extra
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 because overwork is not safe for their employees for physical and mental health.
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, every year 70% of
workers
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 are affected by different health diseases and the reason behind
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 situation is that too much workload.
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, more
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 has a detrimental impact on human's health. In conclusion,
people
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 have more advantages physically as well as mentally when they are doing a fixed number of
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 job, while employers should understand the worker's situation and should not ask for an extension
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