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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Currently, technological advancements are facilitating
nations
’
developments
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. It seems different
countries
 have essentials of producing or importing same goods.
This
 phenomenon has had plenty
creative
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 outcomes for most
countries
,
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 and causes similarity among
nations
. On the one hand, social infrastructures have played a critical role in the quality of life. Providing that
nations
 ad access to the same products, societies might have
same
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 quality of life.
This
 causes social justice among various
countries
.
Moreover
, it is generally accepted that all
nations
 include a number of talented persons. In developing
countries
which
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 suffer from
lack
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 of critical means of
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improvements
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 those talents might never
fulfill
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 themselves. It appears accessing to same products could remedy the circumstance.
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 and maybe the most staple positive outcome of more similarity among
nations
 is
better
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 political relationship between governments.
This
 not only does reduce tensions between
countries
 but
also
 ameliorate economic affairs between them. Better political and financial
relationship
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 among
countries
 might cause decent benefits for citizens.
For instance
, vital medical technologies transfer to less developed
countries
. A
world
 without any serious tension
results
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 lower portion of GDP which stands for
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 domestic product for military budget; Hardly could anyone deny the influences of these events. It might be said that
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 many economics have been deepened on lack of some goods in various locations of the
world
 and the access to same product causes catastrophic results for them.
However
,
positive
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the positive
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 outcome of a
world
 full
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nations
 outweighs its negative aspects. To conclude, it appears wise to consider more similar
countries
 advantageous for everyone, since it is bringing lots of benefits. As an example, A
world
 without any potential war.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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