The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
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The pie chart depicts the generation of electricity from various
sources
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in a country over the period of 18 years, from 1985 to 2003. As shown in the pie chart, there are six different proportions of
sources
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such
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as natural gas, coal, hydrogen, nuclear, oil, and other renewable
sources
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.
According to
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statistics, the generation of electricity by using natural gas rose from 13 per cent in 1985 to 23 per cent in 2003. Usage of coal was 8% in 1998 after 18 years, it got increased by 5%. There was a negligible amount of growth in other renewable
sources
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. In 1985,
utilization
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the utilization
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of oil crossed half of the proportion,
however
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, in 2003, it fell drastically (39 per cent). Nuclear power sunk to 17% from 22%. Hydrogen power remains unchanged over
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period of time. Shortly stated, Coal, nuclear, and other resources continued to grow,
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nuclear and oil decreased.
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, hydrogen remains constant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources with synonyms.
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