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Nowadays, many people sleep less than before. What are some of the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

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These days, lots of
people
 are sleeping less on average per night than they had done previously. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
this
 growing trend and give my own opinion.
Firstly
, I will give reasons for why
people
 are sleeping less than before and
secondly
 I will discuss whether I feel
this
 is a positive or negative thing. It seems clear to me that many
people
 are now forced to
work
 longer and longer hours in their employment. Nowadays, many employers will pay overtime to staff to encourage them to
work
 more hours in the office or elsewhere.
For example
 on special occasions, some businesses will pay double rates to their staff members which means many
people
 want to
work
 these shifts.
This
 often means
people
 find less time for sleep. Another reason for
this
 growing trend could be
people
 using social media and technology before sleep, which makes it more difficult to rest. In my opinion,
people
 who are sleeping less are more
at
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 danger of making mistakes and errors at
work
, which could lead to harm and injuries. If
people
 who use machinery at
work
 don't get enough rest, they could make a mistake that could possibly injure themselves badly. It's
also
 true that
people
 who do not get enough sleep are often more stressed and unhappy than others. I feel that
people
 who are very tired can become irritable much faster than those
people
 who feel
well rested
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. There are many reasons why
people
 nowadays are sleeping less and less, and there are many positives and negatives to
this
 trend. In conclusion, I feel that overall it is much better to sleep more and have a restful night's rest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Circadian rhythms
  • Productivity
  • Stress
  • Anxiety
  • Cognitive function
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Globalization
  • 24/7 economy
  • Blue light
  • Sleep patterns
  • Sleep maintenance insomnia
  • Irregular working hours
  • Lifestyle factors
  • Emotional well-being
  • Health consequences
  • Flexible work hours
  • Quality of life
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