A friend of your is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Ivy, I know you must be worried and mad at me because I was not reverting back to your messages but you know what I was so occupied

cause

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because

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my grandparents came to visit me

last

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week, so sorry for that.

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, I am over the moon as you are trying something adventurous for the very first time

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that

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which

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is camping. I believe that it is going to be

really

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a really

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fun and amazing experience, you would ever had. Having said that, I want to tell you that going on holiday for

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kind of sport, summers are best.

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, try to plan it in

summar

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summary

. Even though it is going to be hot, still do not forget to take a jacket

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you for a cold night.

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, you might get some rashes and small injuries, do not worry. And remember to carry a first aid kit. If it is okay for you, I would love to join you on

this

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trip.

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, forward me the details and dates for the activity.

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, we can invite Chloe too. After so long we will get some time with each other. I will be waiting for your reply. Regards Sooji

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coherence cohesion

Try to organize the paragraphs better by having distinct sections for each main point (enjoyment, disadvantages, your willingness to join).

task achievement

Ensure that your letters address all parts of the letter prompt, expand on reasons why your friend would enjoy camping.

task achievement

The letter has a friendly and conversational tone, which is very suitable for writing to a friend.

coherence cohesion

The closing of the letter is warm and engaging, making the reader feel valued.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

200 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
cost-effective
unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
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lasting memories
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