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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person’s #status #possessions #values #honour #kindness #trust
It is argued that
people
 are judged these days by how much money they have rather than their morals and characters.
This
 essay completely agrees with
this
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 essay will
first
 discuss, how society has made their
mind set
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mindset
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 regarding
people
’s status, and
then
 how
news
 and
media
has
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 influenced the commoners to judge
the
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others. A fixed mind
set-up
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 by the community has privileged the
people
 on the basis of their social status.
This
 is to say, many
people
 believe that a person with
luxurious
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 car, branded clothes and having millions of money is really worthy, despite knowing the actual facts behind all those sources.
Therefore
, leading
people
 to value
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material things
the
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more.
For instance
, many restaurants provide V.I.P sitting arrangements for social statutory
people
, whereas others are treated as normal customers.
Also
,
media
 and
news
 reflect the pseudo worthiness of
people
 on daily basis.
Televisions
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Television
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, showing how
media
people
 are running behind
the
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rich personalities, trying to take their picture and interviews that enables a layman to fascinate towards the
news
, making
people
to
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believe that these characters are more worthy nowadays.
For example
, hundred’s of
news
 reporters keep a continuous eye on celebrities and expose their personal lives to
public
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the public
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that
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which
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 makes
people
to
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adore those celebrities. In conclusion, being a wealthy person is admired by
people
 because of their
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mindset
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mind set
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mindset
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 and the
media
who
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continuo
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continue
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 updating about high standardise
people
, that has become far more valuable than just being a kind human.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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