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Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #component #school #program
Children
 in
this
 modern era have all the magnificent toys, food and many more other interesting things
thanin
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than in
than
 the past. They are bound to have a craving
on
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 all
this
 stuff that they see.
In other
words
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children
 will be spending money on anything they want or find
it
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interesting to them. Even some adults these days have some kind of craving
to
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 the thing they find
it
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amazing. If financial education starts at the very beginning of the
school
 years,
this
 will help them to understand the value of money.
Children
 should
also
 be taught to manage their expenses and ways to spend wisely. When a child is being taught
this
 in the
school
 program, the child will be able to apply it when they are out to purchase or when they have left the
school
. They will not be cheated when they are young and
this
 will not only benefit their families but
also
 the whole country where they live when they are older.
However
, there are some
children
 that are capable of
handle
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the
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their
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financial
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 in a very positive way even before they learned it at
school
.
This
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This child
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children
 would have learnt from their families or people around them. They manage money better, compared to the other
children
 from wealthier families for whom spending is not a problem. My conclusion is,
children
 regardless of their background should be taught financial education from
school
 at the very beginning
then
 only parents guide them from home as well.
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