In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
There is an upward trend in
people
facing with
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health
problems due to consuming too much fast food
. As a result
, federal authorities have to increase a higher tax on this
type of food
. This
essay disagrees with this
statement because in
order to solve Add the comma(s)
,in
this
problem, they should educate their people
on and support exercise facilities.
First
of all, health
should be put into one of the essential subjects for everyone. It is necessary to learn how to have healthy
life at a very young age because Add an article
a healthy
understanding
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the understanding
an understanding
of
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this
knowledge can help people
aware of their eating habits. They will select food
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the food
which
has more useful nutrition than fatty foods with high calories. Correct pronoun usage
that
Although
organic products are expensive than fast food
, they worth for
spending. Change preposition
apply
For example
, after teaching about healthy
lifestyle, children choose to eat an apple as a snack Correct article usage
a healthy
instead
of ice cream.
Moreover
, government
should support exercise activities and Add an article
the government
sport
facilities Change the noun form
sports
such
as organizing marathon campaigns and providing Add an article
a park
park
for running. When Fix the agreement mistake
parks
state
can provide suitable facilities, it increases opportunities for Add an article
the state
a state
people
to take part in outdoor activities. Therefore
, they can have a healthy lifestyle and have less
chances to face Change the quantifier
fewer
with
bad Change preposition
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health
conditions. Moreover
, spending
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by spending
on
moving their body, they will not have Change preposition
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a
time to search for high calories Change the article
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food
. To illustrate, in Thailand, when running campaign
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campaigns
become
more popular, Change the verb form
becomes
people
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tend
trend
to be aware of their Correct your spelling
tend
health
and join this
activity without hesitation.
In conclusion, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with the idea of adding up tax on fast food
because giving appropriate information about health
and improving sport system are the solutions. Besides
, all above mentioned
steps must be taken to reduce the Add a hyphen
above-mentioned
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
people
suffering from their health
problems.Submitted by Varaiphand on
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