Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster and cheaper means of public transport. Some other think that there are other important factors to take into consideration like (petrol, cost and environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays, many masses said that ruling parties must invest money in
transportation
like trains and public vehicles which can lead the travelling cheaper as well as faster, while other think inflation, pollution and petroleum are
also
main issues which need to
be lighten
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. Well, in my
opinion
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transportation
is
main
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issue for focusing on. Let's discuss both points.
First
of all, travel is important for survival in daily life. Everyone travels for various reasons like job, education and shopping and so on.
Therefore
, everyone chooses their own vehicles
for
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travel fast .
Therefore
, sometimes so
many
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traffic on roads which may cause pollution and accidents that's way, public needs subways and trams to go one place to another in
short
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time. It will help to save time and traffic and helps to decrease the utilization of petroleum.
For example
, in Japan, they use trams in every city to make
transportation
easy and assessable.
However
, people face problems of inflation in every sector which effect
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their living standards.
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want
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pollution-free
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pollution
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free environment that will help them to stay healthy and safe which will only
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through
good
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infrastructure of
transportation
as well as growing several plants. According to
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, degradation is done because of lack of resources , if
government
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the government
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make policies and plans to save
environment
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the environment
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that will definitely work and
also
people support them. In conclusion,
although
both issues are genuine for
public
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the public
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so need to improve them as soon as possible,
transportation
may be
solution
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the solution
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for both petroleum and
environment
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problems which can be tackled by increasing public transports.
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