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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #money #tax
Whether
people
 should pay
tax
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 to the
government
 or not is an argument of great debate. Some
people
 think that it is
government's
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 responsibility to raise
money
 from other sectors and should not take the portion of a person's hard
earning
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 cash while others stand just opposite of
this
 opinion. I believe if the
government
 spend the
money
 for the benefit of the citizen, as it
meant
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is meant
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 to be for every country, and value the mass
people
's opinions and suggestions
how
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on how
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 to best use the
money
,
then
 there is nothing wrong with the
tax paying
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taxpaying
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 method and rather had many positive reasons to do so. Those who are against the
tax paying
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 system often opine that the
government
 should never take their hard earning
money
 for the sake of
country's
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the country's
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 development scheme.
This
 is especially true for those who earn an amount that barely supports his/her family and who are not satisfied with the public service provided by the
government
. In many countries,
people
 have to pay a
tax
 of more than a quarter of the total earning of a year and yet do not get basic facilities like treatment, education and they have to spend their own pocket
money
 for those purposes.
This
 is very natural that they become angry about the
tax paying
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. But
tax
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the tax
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 , collected from the
people
 of a country can be a great fund to use for their betterment by the
government
. There are lots of poor
people
 who can be benefited from the
tax
 paid by the others. The
government
 can build more roads, offer public services, and can introduce other useful
scheme
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 using the
money
. Almost in most
of
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the
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apply
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countries,
people
 who earn more than a predefined amount have to pay
tax
 and not for those who earn less than that amount. So
Government
 is not forcing poor
people
 to pay
tax
 but those who are able to pay
tax
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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