In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access.

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On the one hand, learning through technological platforms would be beneficial for children in remote areas.
First
, online learning is more convenient and flexible than conventional ones by eliminating time and distance barriers. Vietjack.vn,
for instance
, is a well-known educational website in Vietnam that enables children, especially those from remote communities, to quickly access huge resources of lessons ranging from mathematics to literature.
Second
, the introduction of computers helps children acquire IT skills. They could learn how to take advantage of computers or be proficient in typing skills,
such
capabilities that can enhance their employment prospects in the distant future.
On the other hand
, I personally agree with those who contend that it is better to provide more schools and teachers in rural areas. Teachers play an indispensable role in teaching basic literacy and numeracy in the children’s early stages of development. They not only provide a face-to-face learning opportunity to pupils but
also
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in them the value of learning.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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