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There are some information about sales of Fairtrade-*labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

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The tables demonstrate some data regarding
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 in five European nations in 1999 as well as 2004. In general, as
it
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can be seen from the tables, the highest
sales
 of
coffee
 in 1999 and 2004 were related to
Switzerland
 and the
UK
, respectively.
In addition
,
this
 amount
about
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bananas
were
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 the most in
Switzerland
 in both 1999 and 2004.
Furthermore
, it is worth mentioning that in both
coffee
 and
bananas
 there
were
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 an increase in
sales
 from 1999 to 2004 in roughly all
countries
. In terms of
coffee
 expenditure, all of the
countries
 had a growth in
sales
 of
coffee
;
however
,
this
 growth was quite different among them. By way of illustration, the
UK
 had an explosion in
sales
 of
coffee
 from 1.5 in 1999 to 2004 which was an about 14 times rise compared to what it was in 1999.
Switzerland
’s and Belgium’s
sales
 almost doubled from 1999 to 2004.
Besides
, Denmark’s and Sweden’s
increase
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 were not that substantial. In regard
with
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 the other tables which is related to the
sales
 of
bananas
, in both 1999 and 2004,
Switzerland
 had the biggest amount of
sales
 with 15 and 47
millions
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of
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euros, respectively. Apart from
Switzerland
, the
UK
 and Belgium
also
 experienced a significant rise from 1999 to 2004. To be exact, the expenditure of the
UK
 and Belgium were 1 and 0.6 which were reached to 5.5 and 4, respectively. It should be noted that Sweden and Denmark were the only
countries
 which saw a decrease in 2004 compared to 1999. In fact, the
amount
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 of
sales
 nearly halved in these
countries
.
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