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Many people say that eating out in restaurant is better for the individual and the family than cooking and eating at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the midst of a fast-paced lifestyle, eating
food
 from outside has significantly increased over the past few decades. But Is it efficient in any manner? Some
people
 believe the outside
food
 is better than cooking meals at home. I completely disagree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, consuming
food
 from restaurants is not feasible for everyone because of their cost.
For example
, many
food
 outlets add service tax and other added expenses
such
 as travelling, which overall increases the price.
in other words
,
people
 tend to spend more money, by ordering fancy dishes and desserts. I believe it is not practical  Another reason why I disagree with eating from restaurants is that one can never be sure of the quality of
food
. The hygiene at these places is compromised more often because of the fact that they have to cater to many
people
 at the same time.
For example
, if
food
 is not cooked properly can lead to several health issues.
Moreover
, It can
also
 become the reason for several dangerous transmissible diseases like Hepatitis and so on. I, strongly believe that
this
 issue can become inevitable in future.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that eating from outside could relieve these
people
 from cooking, which is becoming hectic in today's stressful lifestyles.
As a result
, members of the families and friends spend time in these spaces to get a sense of togetherness. In conclusion,
although
 it is thought by many that grabbing
food
 from restaurants is better than preparing it at home, I believe it is not practical as it can get over the board in terms of expenditure and
also
 the risk of health are inevitable.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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