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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #part #sports #teams #football #tennis
The bar chart depicts that a tourist information
center
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 that receives
requests
 over six months in a city, in the year 2011. The X-axis contains months from
January
 to
June
, and the Y-axis represents inquiries received by the
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. Data ranges from zero to two thousand. According to the statistics, in
January
, inquiries received in person were low. After that, it continued to grow. It was increased from 400 in
January
 to around 1900 in
June
. When it considers telephone
requests
, in
January
, it was considerably lower than a thousand.
However
, in the following months, it was subjected to ups and downs. By the end of
June
, telephone
requests
 crossed 1600.
Furthermore
, in
January
, inquiries received through letters or emails were just below 800. They fell steadily, at the end of
June
 it was slightly under 400. Overall,
requests
 in person and by telephone surged, but letters or emails sink dramatically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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