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Shortage of houses has become a severe problem in the cities today and only the government can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.

Many people today feel that limited housing in urban areas can only be seriously addressed by governmental action. In my opinion, private investiture in
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 area will always be low so governments bear the burden of responsibility. Only limited support for housing problems will come from the private sector. Large real estate and construction firms are mainly motivated to generate the greatest profits and will
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 largely cater
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 towards a wealthy clientele.
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 means building large apartments and
accomodations
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accommodations
 that likely replace smaller apartments, exacerbating any existing housing crisis. In New York City,
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, ambitious developers knocked down
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 housing
projects
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 and built luxury apartments and brownstone homes. These efforts push poor residents out of the city and
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 away from their work and engender a variety of social problems. In my perspective, the only realistic solution for housing shortages in major urban areas is governmental intervention. Governments can either build themselves or accept bids from construction companies. There are inspirational examples of public works
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 in cities all around the world. The typical process is that the
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 will delineate an undeveloped or poorly planned area for new homes and accept bids from private companies. Since these areas are unavailable for unregulated commercial exploitation, the
government
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 holds power over the private companies. Once these
projects
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 are completed, they can house thousands of residents affordably, which allows occupants to find quality jobs in the city and eventually move out of these housing developments. In conclusion, the
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 is the major catalyst in all housing solutions in cities. Governments ought to prioritise these efforts before cities become too gentrified and
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 hinders upwards social mobility.

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