Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is always argued that whether both
animals
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and human
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could benefit from the presence of
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and would it be better to close them. On one hand, some people are concerning the potentially negative issue that
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could result in. They believe that cages and living
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are extremely too cramped and narrow, unlike wild
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are possible to live in forests and woods. Just like
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,
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are tending to need liberty and freedom. When
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are kept in captivity in
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, they would lose their instincts and often become depressed. Most
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animals
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the animals
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in
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forget how to hunt even though they have a chance to be back
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forests. What’s worse, by keeping
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cooped up in a small cage, there are more opportunities
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extinction since they can not get the conditions they need to mate and reproduce.
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, ecosystems can be badly influenced. It is
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likely that
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could be abused in some
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for entertainment in
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industry.
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, a few years ago, the truth about training elephants in Thailand was exposed in a documentary about
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from BBC. In order to make elephants follow
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of trainers, they keep punishing the
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by hurting them.
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alternatives, there are many proposals that we have. Wildlife parks have been getting more and more popular in the
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ten years. Most importantly, they can provide more space for
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to wander around and those parks have many things in common as their
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homes.
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,
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transportation enables us to travel in a couple of hours across the world. In the future, it will be quite common that
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travel
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from Europe to Africa to visit wild
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within one hour with
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advanced technology.
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, it is no need to build
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to keep wild
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in captivity.
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, children can
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learn
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the habit
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habits
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of
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on some TV programs
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as National Geographic. They can get close to
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more about them on TV than in
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. All in all,
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are not the only way for
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a human
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to learn about wild
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. It is
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essential that wild
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can live in their
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homes.
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are
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capable to study them
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many kinds of ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ethical and animal welfare
  • artificial habitats
  • psychological distress
  • abnormal behaviors
  • conservation
  • inbreading
  • wildlife sanctuaries
  • rehabilitation centers
  • naturalistic habitats
  • virtual and augmented reality
  • ecotourism
  • wildlife documentaries
  • educational platforms
  • genetic pool
  • immersive experiences
  • conservation education
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