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You recently went to a concert and thought one of te singers was very good. You want to tell him hoe you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance -give details of your musical activities -explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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My name is Trisha Patel and doing a study in marketing management.I feel extremely superior when I attained a live concert. It was my
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 experience to see a live event .
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 , I did not want to come but because of my
mother
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 I have to come with her .I feel nostalgic when
tolisten
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to listen
your
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song
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 with amiable lyrics . Your melodious
song
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 touches my heart. You have sung a
song
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 with guitar ,it wants very nice due to that type of capability have a few masses.
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 ,you have a dynamic personality as a singer with a great dressing style. I have
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 been fascinated by singing so I had joined an eminent class which is located near my area but the tutor was always in a hurry to complete the class so they did not allow time for practice and you know it is exceedingly essential. After listing your
song
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 I admired from you so please if possible give me one chance to take some idea about singing lesson so I
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 grow my career in
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 field. I am eagerly waiting for your prompt reply and I feel god bless me if u give me chance . Thanks, Yours sincerely, Trusha Patel

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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