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in the future, all buses cars and tucks will be driverless. the only travelling people will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Transport
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 industry is
forcasted
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forecasted
 to have a major shift into
inhuman
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 driving experience. Travellers will be the only part of
this
 commuting process.
This
 speculation has many advantages in creating
sustainable
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 future while
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 detrimental
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effects
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affects
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effects
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 on personal confidentiality and the economy. The crucial negative impact of these artificial machines would be, they are vulnerable to unethical hacking . Passengers privacy and safety can be compromised if the main server is attacked by thieves. To illustrate, certain private photos and travelling information of a passenger was spread
in
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 the internet from a taxi company in
europe
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 after it was exposed to a cyber attack.
Secondly
,
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haulage
huge
hualage
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 industry has provided millions of jobs for people. Driverless transport will redundant many
employess
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employees
employers
 in
this
 field, who will be simply replaced by machines.
This
 may create
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 catastrophe to a country
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 Because the interim regime would be burdened to find jobs for them. Every cloud has a silver line.
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,
use
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 of automatic
vehicles
are
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 proven to be mitigating accidents while commuting. Artificial sensors implanted in the engines
communicates
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 with other cars
in
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 the road and avoid any adverse repercussions, which is unidentifiable by human drivers.
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, Uber employs computerized taxis, which will report to
thier
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their
 nearby
vehicles
 on the traffic congestion and weather
condtion
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condition
conditions
 which will be
usefull
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useful
 for other
travelers
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
Additional
, these
inovations
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innovations
 are proven to be useful in addressing
looming
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 global
climatic
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crisis
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.Most of the computerized automobiles run on renewable energy.
Hence
, carbon
emission
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emissions
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 will be dropped
signifficantly
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significantly
significant
.
For instance
, a recent survey in Canada suggests that
autmotive
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automotive
vehicles
 have reduced the use of crude oil in Ontario and the quality of the air seems to have improved after
this
 change. Based on
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 details , I believe that the advantages
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 using computer programmed
vehicles
outwiegh
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outweigh
 the adversaries. In conclusion ,
its
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 evident that driverless
vehicles
 are subject to
criticsm
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criticism
 due to growing criminal activities and unemployment.
However
,
its
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 proven to be
life saving
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 and
environmental
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 friendly , which is a major support to the growing
uncertanities
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uncertainties
 in the environment.
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