Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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cut-throat world, to maintain their position in their chore, many employees are not able to sustain their
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balance.
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number of job-holders are
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their
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,as they are not able to set out sufficient
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to drill. Reduction in working hours, doing outdoor activities, cultivating balanced diet habits, encouragement from the government and
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are some of the solutions to
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problem The main reason for the deterioration of
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amongst employees is
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the adaptation to
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sedentary lifestyle. In
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contemporary era, mankind
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completely dependent on machinery to round off their
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in less
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, many companies set out deadlines in
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,
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of which working people are bequeathing their leisure
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to complete the
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in given
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. In consequence, people tend to return to their homes late,
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loosing
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all their stamina, which
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inturn
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results in skipping of
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. During weekends, they prefer to rest
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day
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of exercising, few of them would rather play
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or watch movies, go on
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. It is essential to address
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issue for
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of the society. Every person should understand the negative impact of not working out on their
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. People should opt
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to complete their daily household tasks.
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government
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should start taking precautionary measures by addressing the importance of good
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to the companies and employees. Companies should understand the fact that" good
health
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is equal to more productivity" which is indirectly beneficial
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corporation
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, offices must be built near to parks and gyms,so that staff can
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in their free
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.
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,
administration
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should introduce new laws,stating about particular
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work time
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and provide more government holidays. In conclusion, society should acknowledge the viable solutions to ensure that they achieve positive results in future by adapting
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a good
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healthy lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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