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The popularity of tourism is increasing day by day. There are many benefits of tourism, but it also creates some problems. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
the
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recent years, the number of
people
 who travel
in
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 different places has considerably surged. In my opinion, any drawbacks of
tourism
 are overshadowed by its benefits in the sense that it significantly contributes to the local economy. Admittedly, there are numerous drawbacks of
tourism
 in the local area.
Firstly
, those who visit the local area or tourist spot can damage the local culture and customs. To elaborate more, there are lots of differences between the local
people
 and tourists in language and customs
such
 as language, dress up.
Furthermore
, when tourists are gettering in tourist places they make crowd and noise which is harmful
for
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 local inhabitants
such
 as birds and animals.
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, in recent
time
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times
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, tourists visit cox’s
bazar
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Bazar
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sea
 beach throwing dust, bottles in the
sea
 which polluted
sea water
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 and
threated
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treated
threatened
 for the
sea
 inhabitants.
However
,
tourism
have
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 a significant effect on the local economy. To elaborate more,
people
 who visit tourist places hire hotel rooms, eat at restaurants and travel on local vehicles
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as a result
 hosting
people
 earn money from them.
Also
, it creates
job
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 market and
increase
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 income source for the hosting
people
. Again, due to the tourists’ spot government takes
step
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steps
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 to develop the local roads and communication systems.
For instance
, it was too difficult to go
Saint
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 Martin Island because
of
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it is situated in
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deep
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sea
 but now government allocate a budget to improve the communication systems of Saint Martin Island with Tecknaf. In conclusion, despite its negative effects, I personally believe that
tourism
 industries would bring more benefits to the local inhabitants and communities. It boosts the economic condition of the country and creates job opportunities for the local
people
.
Submitted by Sayeed Sajeeb on

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