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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books beause they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what xtent do you agree of disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #beause #xtent
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The given graphs compare the average
precipitation
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 and
temperature
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 of
Brasilia
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 and
Recife
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, two Brazilian cities,
in addition
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, information about the average hours of sunshine and number of days with thunder is
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 depicted. Overall, in
Recife
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, the
precipitation
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 is more intense between April and July, while in
Brasilia
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, the average
mm
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 per
month
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 is the lowest, during the same period.
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,
Brasilia
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 has a higher thermic amplitude than
Recife
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. In
Brasilia
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, the rainfall season goes from October to March with an average of
precipitation
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 between 150 and 250
mm
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 and around 20 wet days per
month
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, whereas, dry season, with
precipitation
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 approximately less than 50mm per
month
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, happens from May to August.
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, in
Recife
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, during the period between March to July, the rain levels range from 150 to 250
mm
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 per
month
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, while during the months of September to January the levels go down to less than 50mm. With regards to
temperature
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, In
Brasilia
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, the months of July to October, have the highest temperatures, peaking up to 35
ºC
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, and from May to August, the minimum
temperature
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 is the lowest, around 5
ºC
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.
However
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, the average
temperature
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 remains steady all year long, varying from 28
ºC
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 to 15ª, except between June and August, when the minimum is around 10
ºC
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.
On the other hand
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, in
Recife
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, the highest
temperature
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 is almost 40
ºC
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, during almost the whole year except in April, July and August while the minimum
temperature
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 is 15
ºC
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 during June. In
this
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 city, the average
temperature
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 remains steady between 25
ºC
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 and 30
ºC
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 during almost all year. It is
also
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 noticeable in the chart, that
Brasilia
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 has, on average, fewer hours of sun than
Recife
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, but an average number of thunder days much higher than
Recife
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.
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