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Some people believe that there are various reasons that can motivate a person to keep working for the same company whereas others say that money is the main reason which gives motivation. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #company #money #reason #motivation
In the present scenario,
every
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one
 wants to
work
 in
well-known
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a well-known
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company
.
Although
. it is sometimes thought employees can
work
 in the same institution and there are numerous reasons can affect to
this
 situation, others believe that only
money
 can motivate them. In my opinion, I considered that person can encourage to do
job
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the job
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 in the particular corporation for
long
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a long
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 time and more than
one
 factors are responsible. There are several reasons why people want to
work
 in the same organization. The
first
 and foremost important thing is that job satisfaction. Every worker wants they get all respects and proper position on the
work place
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workplace
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.
For instance
,
one
 survey has conducted in the UK, more than 70% employees prefer to do
work
 with
one
company
 when the
empoyer
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employer
 is
suppotive
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supportive
 and co-operative. Another point to consider
person
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a person
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 can motivate to
work
 at the same place when they are getting a lot of benefits from
owner
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the owner
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 of the
company
.
For example
, holiday tour packages, some
percantages
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percentages
percentage
 of
money
 for their rental house, fuel expenses, school fees for their children and so on.
In addition
, a good
work
condition
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conditions
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, rewards for excellent
work
 and promotion are
also
 necessary to motivate them.
On the other hand
, some opponents have
opposite
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the opposite
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view
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views
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, they think that
money
 plays a pivotal role and it has
positive
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a positive
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 influence.
Furthermore
, people full fill their dreams
by
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with
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money
 and it is
also
 useful
their
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for their
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livehood
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livelihood
.
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Humans
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Human
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A human
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 can not live without enough
money
.
Hence
,
money
motivate
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motivates
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 people to
work
 in the same
company
. In the conclusion, it is true that various reasons
that
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apply
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can motivate to keep working for the same
company
, but the importance of
money
 should not neglect.
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