Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world Do you think this a positive or negative development?

In today technologies society, everybody
are
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using
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or smartphone, which they can buy a lot of foreign goods.
Therefore
, many
countires
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countries
are growing
rappenly
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rampantly
, as they
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import
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and export for their needs. I believe
this
trading business can make the national get more benefit, as it people can have more
oppotunities
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opportunities
for work and the government can get more tax. In Australia today, most of the fresh food
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export
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to
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overseas, which other countries can pay more money than local. So, farmers prefer to sell their fruit and vegetables to Asian countries to get
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income.
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grape
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grapes
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only can sell $100 in Australia,
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if they could send the fruit
to
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oversea
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overseas
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they could get
double
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price
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of
this
.
Moreover
,
foreigner
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foreigners
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always
love
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to buy
good
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goods
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from others, because they think local
farmer
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farmers
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cannot produce as good as Western.
Furthermore
, not many people can effort to live their own place, so that, if they could buy oversea goods without living their own country, which it is very
conviniences
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convenience
conveniences
and save cost. Sometimes people
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on others
good
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too much,
this
will make the local seller
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of
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income. For another example, if everyone chasing
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milk power from New
zaeland
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Zealand
,
then
who will buy local milk, and how the farmers can
servive
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survive
service
with
this
situation.
Althought
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Although
, business-men enjoyed the trading income and the buyers love to spend money for national goods. Eventually, I believe these activities can bring more pros than cons for them,
this
is why many countries are so
simillar
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similar
to each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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