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Some people say that children who find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult do not have to study them at school. These subjects should be optional, not compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that subjects like
mathematics
 and
philosophy
 should not be obligatory at school, because they seem to be hard to be learnt by some
children
.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
 belief.
First
 and foremost,
mathematics
 helps
children
 to have more job opportunities in the future.
Mathematics
 is the science of data analysis and solving complicated numeral issues which are the basis of any other skills. The more young generation have useful skills, the better work opportunities they may have. In
this
 new age of technology,
for example
, knowing programming languages
such
 as C++ and python could bring a great promotion for young adults at work. But if they do not know
mathematics
 it is impossible for them to work with these kinds of software.
Furthermore
,
philosophy
 is the science that increases the quality of people’s lives. By learning
philosophy
children
 will learn the meaning of life, deal with hard spiritual circumstances and struggle with losses in their life. Since any individual may have to face these issues and questions someday in their lifetime,
this
 subject should not be optional at school but should be compulsory. Some may argue that forcing students to study fields which they do not want to, is
in contrast
 with human freedom of choice,
however
, I think teachers should try their best to make these subjects more attractive and use innovative methods of teaching, so
children
 have better feelings toward these difficult lessons since they are necessary and conducive for their future. To sum up, I think hard fields like
mathematics
 and
philosophy
 should not only be taught at schools but
also
 be compulsory for students to pass them due to their benefits for their forthcoming life.
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