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Junk/Street Food is the most affordable meal for the working class. But health problems due to rampant and uncontrolled consumption are being compounded. It has therefore become imperative for governments to impose a higher tax on them. To what extent do you agree to this arrangement by the government? Give your opinion.

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As high affordability of fast
food
 is affecting main part of the population in ways of health problems and overconsumption, it has been started to be considered that authorities have to impose limitations by taxes on
such
 type of meal.
This
 essay totally disagrees with the given idea as
such
 restrictions may simply turn out inefficacious and is likely to harm those who depend on
such
 a low-cost diet. In case taxes are raised or established where they were not people would probably find other ways of avoiding the law. Despite
this
, a sudden decrease of clients in
this
 field would encourage restaurants to make some compromises and lower the prices of fast
food
 production which clearly shows that
such
 shifts are inappropriate in terms of consumer preference.
For example
, once our local government set limitations on using certain types of motorbikes which resulted in some actions taken from drivers who simply changed particular characteristics of their vehicles and legally proceeded to commute by them. Another issue is that there always have been certain groups of society that are unable to buy quality groceries and are left with the only choice to opt for junk
food
. I think, it is not sensible to deprive them of
such
 an opportunity because one of my neighbours is in a below-average income group, and is enforced to consume low quality
food
, whereas cheap meal has been giving him the opportunity to catch up with bills and pay them in time. In summary, even though high rates of consumption and resulting problems can motivate authorities to take restricting actions, I think that the significance of affordability of
such
 products and the unwillingness of lion's share of society to adhere to the tax raises would make no change in order to resolve given issues.
Submitted by Darkhan Shalbayev on

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