Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the advancement of
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convenience
food
is becoming more popular. Replacing the way of traditional foods and preparation isn't a great method for our health. In
this
essay, I will write about why I disagree
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point that traditional foods are
more
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healthier for us.
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, a lot of chemicals are added
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in convenience
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inconvenience
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food
which is not good for people. Every convenience
food
that we eat
contain
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at least one chemical whether we notice
or
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not. One of the reasons why people are addicted to
convenice
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convenience
food
is to save time. But from my point of view, if we prepare traditional foods
conciously
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consciously
we can save time.
Secondly
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