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ome older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology, such as smartphones and computers. What are the reasons, give solutions?

In the modern world, as technology is becoming more advanced senior citizens are finding it difficult to use electronic devices like mobile
phones
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 and desktops.In
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 essay , we will discuss the causes and solutions
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 problem.
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 , advanced technology is quite complicated and
older
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the older
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 public are incapable of operating with
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 gadget
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 as computers and
phones
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 which is due to the fact that lack of knowledge of
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 devices.
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, youngsters can fully operate with computer and cell
phones
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 as, they are more aware of it ,though older folk comes from an early generation that does not have
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 appliances , so they find it difficult to handle it,
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 ,
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an insufficient
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 idea about the modern tools has led to
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 struggle among aged individuals.
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, the solution for
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 issue is simple , young ones are more into gadgets and with their instructions and ,guidance
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 community can easily use call up and computers.
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, a young adult in each house can assist their grandmother or father to operate
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 .
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 , with the aid of a younger ,child we can provide assistance to our senior individuals. To conclude, lack of understanding in certain gadgets had resulted in difficulties
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 operating them by aged peoples . While
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 through our younger generation people we can solve
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 problem by providing information about the devices.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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