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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment What damages does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individual to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damages #government
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Plastic
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The plastic
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 material used for bags,
bottles
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 and packaging got adverse effects on
environment
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the environment
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.In
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essay
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about
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what damages does
plastic
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 do to
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nature and what measures can be taken by the government and an individual to resolve
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 issue. To start with,
plastic
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 is a substance
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take
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 ages to get decompose within the soil. As
plastic
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 is
cheaper
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a cheaper
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 and
durable
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 alternative for many other materials like rubber, steel, and wood it got widely used for everyday items by
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manufactures
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. To illustrate, the number one
plastic
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 waste found around the surroundings are
plastic
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bottles
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,
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 was because water packaging plants found it more
cost effective
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 to package water using
plastic
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bottles
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. As
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
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 increased day by day, so does the people found it more affordable to buy
stuffs
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stuff
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 made from
plastic
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.
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,
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 tread eventually led to
accumulation
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the accumulation
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 of
plastic
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 waste and due to its slow decaying process, it needed more space to be dumped around our surroundings.
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, with the collective efforts from the government and people,
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 ongoing problem can be kept under control. As an individual, we should recycle
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plastic based
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product
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products
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 whenever it is possible.
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, most
of
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plastic
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the plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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 are recyclable, as
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responsible
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people
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person
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 we can dump
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bottle
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bottles
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over
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 recycle bin found near our cities or town.
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, the environment ministry can impose strict rules against the industries
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 are involved in non-recyclable
plastic
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 packaging and prompt makers who are involved in alternative technology for packaging. To simplify, the government of India are providing subsidies to factories
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 are producing bags and
bottles
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 made of bamboo straws. To sum up, it is true
plastic
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 cannot be replaced overnight by any other substance but with proper administration and people owning their responsibility
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 ongoing problem can be resolved.
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