computers-may-have-brought-tremendous-benefits-to-mankind-but-their-negative-impact-on-children-cannot-be-overlooked. Do u agree or disagree with this view.

There is no doubt computer is boon for
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everyone
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Computers
change the way of thinking and life of human
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.
This
essay will highlight the advantages of using
computers
as well as their harmful effect on
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of children.In my
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with
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statement advantages are outweigh than disadvantages. To commence with
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merit is that
computers
are very helpful in
feild
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field
of study. To
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it,teachers teach students with
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presentations which attract the children and improve their learning abilities. It
also
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study .which helps to boost their skills and
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knowledge
.
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survey revealed that 70%
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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to perform
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a task
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in different
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fields
. It makes the life of students more
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easier and
vast.
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,it makes the life of people
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easier than past and
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their work
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and without errors. On the flip side, there are some drawbacks of using
computers
.Nowadays
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children
using
computers
for
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time like 7-8 hours which put harmful effects on their
health
. To explicate that,
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children
playing games for
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time which get their eyesight weak and make them obese.
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,
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health
organisation conduct a survey in 2020
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that 40%
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are suffering from
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obesity
and eyesight weak due to
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gadgets for
long
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time.
Consequently
, it put
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on the
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children
child's
physical , mental and social
health
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agree with
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phenomenon
computers
have positive and negative effects but positive
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affects
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outweigh the negative. In conclusion,
although
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that
computers
are boon for society yet if use out of limit it
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can become
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for them.
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