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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient ? Give reasons for your answer ans include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #life #ans
It is true that the
internet
 completely changed
lives
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the lives
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 of
millions
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people
 while the world. Nowadays everyone, from children to old men,
have
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 at least one gadget and use it every day. I completely agree that
this
 innovation made our
life
 more comfortable and convenient. The
internet
help
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helps
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 us in different sides of our
life
. Every morning most
of
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people
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the people
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 start
from
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by
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 checking news, e-mail or messages
instead
newspapers
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of newspapers
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 as it did our parents.
People
 have possibilities
work
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to work
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, study and travel by using the
internet
 connection and different applications. The importance of the role of
internet
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 has become very clear since the beginning of
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic.
Due
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this
 pandemic we were isolated from relatives , friends, colleagues and most
of
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people
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the people
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 began to
work
 and study remotely . Even if we are so far from the office and customers , the
internet
allow
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 us to feel that we continue to
work
 together.
Next
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reasons
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reason
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 is from my own
life
. My three children are students and study abroad. We have to see and talk every day by video or can send
message
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messages
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 to each other. Thank
the
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internet
 I still
known
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 about any problems they have and
able
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am able
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 to solve them on time . I might give
to
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my children not only moral
,
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 but
also
 financial support by sending money via banking applications. I was
wonder
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 when my 76 years old mother started to learn and
then
 use YouTube
channel
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channels
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 and enjoy
by
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watching different movies or concerts. Two months ago I was appointed to a new position in my company with more high responsibility. In
this
 role, I have to do completely new things,
for example
 preparing presentations for various events. I have absolutely no experience in
this
 part of
work
. In
such
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a situation
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situation
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,situation
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 I am trying to find
solution
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a solution
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in
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on
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 the
internet
. If it is not successful , I can organize a meeting with colleagues from
global
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the global
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 team through networking and ask them to share the necessary information . In conclusion, I believe that the importance of the
internet
 in
people
’s
life
 can grow from year to year and we will have unlimited opportunities of using networking in different areas .
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