Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In general, due to the current ever-growing

economy

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development and

globalization

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expansion of the world, more and more

events

, namely, Olympic Games, World Cup and other sports

event

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events

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have been

organizing

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to tighten the relationship of different nations. It is often argued that there are numerous

of

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advantages, whilst others disagree and point out the drawbacks. In my point of view, I

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that these worldwide

events

bring lots of benefits for the hosted

country

generally and the citizen particularly. As a matter of fact, it is undeniable about the beneficial gain in both finance and mental aspects that can be earned by hosting sports

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.

This

is imperative for the overall growth of any

country

since it helps to attract massive of tourists who come to visit and various invited celebrities to advertise the hosted

country

.

In addition

, it

also

resolves the shortage of occupation issues of that current

country

by providing a stable amount of jobs in a prolonged period of time, mostly in

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stage. Tokyo Olympics is a prime example, according to the Japanese government’s official report,

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brought about more than 30 billion dollars in revenue and have introduced the world

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of the finest and unique traditions

such

as modesty, friendliness and perfectionism. In general, especially in an ever-growing of different nation’s relationships at present, the spirit of mutual support is encouraged by United Nations and it becomes one of the most vital regulations. Financial assistance is a prime example, the majority of developed countries In conclusion, despite the minor effect of downside’s international

events

, their pros obviously outweigh the cons. In my opinion, most of the consequences of crimes that could happen during

events

are not difficult to be minimized or wiped out by the strict promulgated laws.