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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion You should write at least 250 words.

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A number of people believe
latest
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the latest
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technology
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such
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 as
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internet
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the internet
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 has made shopping much more convenient than before, whereas some others argue that it is not the case. In
this
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 essay, I will analyze both views, but in my
opinion
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 there is no way to deny that up to date
technologies
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 like online shopping, clearly has made our lives much
more
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easier to buy
things
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 compared to
prior
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the prior
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 era. Using modern
technologies
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,
for
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example
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internet
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, individuals are able to buy
things
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 in a matter of seconds using various online platforms. It is
also
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 easier and much more convenient to scrutinize and compare various specifications and designs as information is easily available.
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, from my own experience,
in
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my
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 young
age
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 I had to spend
couple
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 of days browsing various shops to check out different designs available, whenever I bought some
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clothes
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cloths
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clothes
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, but now through the blessing of
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the internet
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internet
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 I am able to do it in minutes.
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,
although
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technologies
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 made it easier to get information quickly, now it takes much more time to receive goods at hand if ordered online due to shipping
issue
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.
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, if a person orders something online, it will be packed by the seller,
then
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 handed over to
shipper
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the shipper
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 and after that
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finally
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 the buyer will receive it after 2-3 days.
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, if someone wants to buy and enjoy a product or service instantly
its
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it's
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 always better to purchase from
physical
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a physical
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 shop.
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, there are numerous complaints regarding the quality of the products by customers who procure
things
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from
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online.
Thus
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, it is clear that
technology
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 hasn’t made the process easier,
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instead
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 it only provides
with
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more details. In my opinion,
although
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 people have the option to buy from physical shops,
but
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through the use of
technology
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 it is possible to know about products or services which was
otherwise
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 might not be a reality.
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Moreover
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 companies bringing new offers for urgent delivery.
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,
clearly
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technology
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 has made life a lot easier regarding buying
things
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. To conclude, people are divided in their
believe
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belief
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 whether modern
technologies
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 made life easier or not when buying
things
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, but I think facilities
such
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 as
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internet
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the internet
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 made life much more convenient than
past
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in past
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 era.
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