Children should never be educated by parents at home? Do you agree or not?

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if children are
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studying
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they have multiple positive and negative things. The positive things are that they are hungry can eat at the moment when they are not obligated on one exact hour like
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example they are tired they can study after
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one or two hours. The bad
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for me
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you are going to be not serious at studying and you are not going to really study and with
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you can’t get your exams with good - - - -. For me is better to go to a not
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school because you are going to be good learned but for most of the children prefer the
home
education because is more fun. I prefer not the
home
school because I don’t want to be stupid. Thank you for all of you. Good and careful listening.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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