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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are crippled by gridlocked traffic. What are the possible solutions for these cities?

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Owning a car has become mandatory in the present lifestyle. Increased
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 on city roads is creating chaos for people living in cities. The essay will discuss the reasons and possible solutions to overcome
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 issues in cities. Globalization has created a greater supply of different models of cars for a cheaper price which created artificial demand for personal vehicles. Customers are tempted to buy their vehicle as supply is increased. Public
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 is poorly developed with the growing population which resulted in people preferring to drive on their own.
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, most of the people are lacking to plan their journey according to their schedule which is
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 forcing them to cover any delays by using their
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.
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, poor
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 management system, lack of quality roads create
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 on roads. The government should monitor laws to control the prices of cars to control the excess demand. The introduction of technology to manage
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 and detouring the
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 in high volume areas at specific times will help to avoid
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.
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, the government should invest to develop the public
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 system by providing on-time service and by providing connecting services across the whole city. The governments should impose strict
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 rules to avoid accidents which could create
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congestions
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. Decentralized development helps to decrease the population density and by doing that, the
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 will be diverted to different directions. In summary, increase in own
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 resulted in
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congestions
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 in many cities but by proper development of other forms of
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 and strictly imposed
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 rule along with the decentralized development could solve a part of the issue.
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,
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 could be a long time never-ending process that should be monitored with high priority.
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